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【黑龙江高考作文】2021年哈尔滨市道外区一模考试英语作文讲解(含王老师手写范文)

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下方是word版作文题目

六、书面表达(本题共20分)

假如你是九年级学生王小红,毕业在即,在下周的英语课上,你班将要举行一次成长经验交流会。请你根据以下信息,写一篇发言稿,谈谈自己的成长体会。

写作要点∶

1. 初中生活即将结束,你在很多方面(aspect)取得了进步。

2. 过去的自己∶

(1) 英语不好;

(2)不善言谈;

(3)不愿意参加班级活动。

3. 说一说自己在上述哪两方面产生了变化以及是如何产生这些变化的。

写作要求∶

1. 不得使用真实姓名、地点和班级、学校名。

2. 适当加入细节,使内容充实、行文连贯。

3. 字迹工整、语言精练、表达准确、条理清晰。

4. 至少80 词。

下方是参考范文

Dear classmates,

How time flies! Four years’ school life will come to an end, and I really have a lot of things to share with you here. I have made great progress in many aspects in the past four years. I was not good at English and did not know how to communicate with others. Apart from these, I was also unwilling to take part in class activities.

But now, things have changed a lot. First, my English skills have improved a lot. Last month, I even won the first prize in the English Speech Contest. I think such a success happens mainly because I keep practicing and never give up. Second, I talk more and make more friends. Thanks to your encouragement, I know how to get along well with others. I am quite satisfied now and feel grateful for all you have done for me.

That’s all. Thank you for your attention.

讲评部分

本文既简单又难。

简单在于谈过去和现在,话题比较贴近生活,表达也不会很难。

但难又在于这篇文章不太好安排段落结构、不太好处理逻辑衔接。

即:学生们写出来句子容易,但让句子之间平滑过渡、有效衔接不容易。

这篇文章没有需要特别整理出来的词伙,大家注意分析范文里的遣词造句、起承转合即可。

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